(and this is not regarding only this homework but my life as a whole so behold :D )
OK, I think I am going with alliteration and repetitions because that's what I've been doing the past 6 years - repeat commands to children who don't give a ... :D
Pitter, patter, lay me on my pillow,
close all the roads and tunnels
and open portals to the past.
There I'll pay for my mistakes,
and play the game of pain.
Again.
And I'll try to escape
but all the roads and tunnels are closed.
I am stuck in the portal,
pushing the walls,
hoping for a hidden passage,
and then it dawns on me
that there is no timetravel -
it's all but a movie that I play
And I've been playing it so often
that it's painted on my heart.
Still, here I am, watching it again
because it's raining outside
and all the roads and tunnels
are closed.
Well, the poem certainly doesn’t show you’ve not got a clue! The alliteration, repetition and the rhythm are all really well handled – and the whole poem is nicely structured so that the repeated line about roads and tunnels acquires different emotional ‘value’ each time it appears (most obviously at the end).