Who are we?
Where the path leads?
Unwashed followers
Brain fried experts
Green to Gray company
Welcome, welcome!
Yes! Leave, but a dream,
You’re now asleep
And when I count back
From 3 to 1
You’re done
Forget your mother’s beauty
And the simple sound of freedom
3, 2, 1
You’re done
Witness of the transformation
Fear once cocooned
Fear once afraid
Now ruling, cruelly over open grave
Bloomed butterfly out of the deepest night
Walks the day - Fear, so unafraid
3, 2, 1
You’re done
Being brave
Forget
Forget
Forget
The short lines work well here to create a particular rhythm/atmosphere – and I like the way you use repetition/variation – ‘From 3 to 1/You’re done’, ‘3,2,1/You’re done’ etc. And especially the three ‘forget’s at the end – which is quite a ‘high risk’ ending, but you ‘earn’ it with the preceding poem (if you see what I mean). I’d be tempted to avoid words like ‘fear’ – i.e. naming emotions – it’s often more effective to ‘show’ or suggest the emotion – although, that said, the last ‘Fear, so unafraid’ is probably necessary and does more ‘work’ than the previous two.