I like it too! It's really well written - lots of good dialogue and description. And the whole opening scene is really strong - the rivalry between the characters is neatly suggested and it's got an authentic feel to it. Likewise the scene with the three women - although I thought that 'faded' a little towards the end. There's an occasional tiny shift in viewpoint which is a little confusing - but that's easily fixed and not a serious problem.
Very conversational. I like it.
I like it too! It's really well written - lots of good dialogue and description. And the whole opening scene is really strong - the rivalry between the characters is neatly suggested and it's got an authentic feel to it. Likewise the scene with the three women - although I thought that 'faded' a little towards the end. There's an occasional tiny shift in viewpoint which is a little confusing - but that's easily fixed and not a serious problem.